Date: 2008-12-18 03:22 am (UTC)
O' wonderful anonymous writer! Thank you so much for gifting me with this sweet Michael/Susan story.

This story really touched me. I loved the not-too-angsty glimpse of Michael, older, jaded, insecure. He felt very real, a new bachelor stepping back out into the real world. I really loved the naturalness of the dialogue, how, despite the fact that they've known each other for a while, there's still this awkwardness as they sort of venture into this new frontier together. Michael's humor and his Ravenclawness comes through so well (the knock knock joke was just sweet and I could visualize that in my head!) And I loved this Susan--loved how you explored her with her injuries and how Michael treated her with a welcome normalcy. The small moments of flirting worked so well throughout this piece; realistic, and great character development.

Demelza was great. I dug the way Ernie and Melz sort of forced them to just get on with the date, with that sort of friendly, "oh, just get on with it already!" attitude, of two people who do seem to have everything and they're trying to get their two wounded friends together.

Thanks so much! I really loved this :-D
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