http://nereycamille.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] nereycamille.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] rarepair_shorts 2016-12-29 09:37 pm (UTC)

I too liked how Draco was written, having to deal with a heavy burden the best he can, and also how you wrote Blaise, innocent yet understanding. I loved the quote at the beginning, I do believe real love doesn't have to mean turmoil!
And I don't know if it was your intention, but some sentences really sounded to me like they there was something really hot going on:
It's a tantalising tease, not providing him with any real release, and he almost wants to cry from the lack of satisfaction he's getting from this.
Draco shivers and increases his speed.
gentle, but firm, applying just the right pressure to provide Draco with the relief he has otherwise been unable to get.
There is a microsecond where Blaise hesitates before he uses the edge of the sleeve of his nightshirt to wipe away the remaining wetness.
LOL
I also very much liked the last sentence. Well done!

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