ext_135103 ([identity profile] maraudersaffair.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] rarepair_shorts 2018-01-15 12:49 pm (UTC)

So, so wonderful! It put a huge smile on my face. There were so many funny lines! The joke about Hermione's dress in the beginning had me laughing! Oh, and George's "You kiss Mum with more feeling than that!" LOL. It's nice to see the Weasleys after the war, surviving and enjoying themselves without Fred. Overall, I just really love being included in their family gatherings!

And your Hermione! I loved how you characterized her. You wrote her spot on! She was sensitive, intuitive, but also a bit self-conscious. She was independent but she also needed the approval of others. You conveyed a lot of complexity about her in this short piece!

Charlie was so kind and sweet. Really liked him with her. I also liked Ron just being there to cheer them on.

Really enjoyed this!! :D

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