And this! ahaha! "James felt his body twitch, and everything ached, but she’d paid him a compliment. A seventh-year had paid him a compliment. A seventh-year girl had paid him a compliment. A seventh-year, beautiful, Slytherin girl had… So James, so very James. Even facing embarrassment and evil enemies, he still has time to notice a pretty girl's compliment.

I can't really decide which part of this was my favorite. liked it all, the progression was great, and the way you portrayed james's feelings for Bellatrix seemed perfectly realistic.